Project 4: In-Progress & First Final
This post is for an in-progress critique. I feel that it is pretty close to complete / resolved.
I decided to keep the open space on the lower left panel and write a haiku about the images.
I decided to keep the open space on the lower left panel and write a haiku about the images.
Growth of life can be
Full of unknown and known
Blessings are made clear
I used natural brush filters and effects to make the middle and right images look like a painting, and then used my Wacom tablet to hand-paint the background and around the figures. I also used the Wacom tablet to completely draw the Ultrasound image. I used yellow in the middle panel to represent the fear I felt at and right before the birth due to the high-risk pregnancy I had, as well as the emergency c-section delivery. I chose the use of the blue color for the right panel to represent the calm and good health of our present day.
I think the meaning and idea behind your image is very strong and lovely. I also really enjoyed your hiaku but it could be interesting to see how the panels look without it?
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback! Please see the next post, as I removed the triptych frame and masks, added drawing lines, and hand-written the haiku to make it all more integrated. I'd love more feedback on the next post so I can adjust anything else needed before our next critique. Thanks again!
Delete-Dorothy
I really enjoy the meaning behind this and it comes through very clearly. The two right panels feel somewhat too photorealistic still in comparison with the completely drawn image so I think if you pushed those images to be a little more like drawings or paintings it would help it feel more unified. Other than that I am loving your progress and your son is so cute! Im excited to see the final product.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback! Please see the next post, as I removed the triptych frame and masks, added drawing lines, and hand-written the haiku to make it all more integrated. I'd love more feedback on the next post so I can adjust anything else needed before our next critique. Thanks again!
Delete-Dorothy
Your concept is so strong and sweet! The only thing I would suggest is incorporating the text better into the image. The white block in the corner kind of takes away from the image to me. I'm looking forward to the final version!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback! Please see the next post, as I removed the triptych frame and masks, added drawing lines, and hand-written the haiku to make it all more integrated. I'd love more feedback on the next post so I can adjust anything else needed before our next critique. Thanks again!
Delete-Dorothy
I agree with the text being a little intrusive where it's positioned now. Concept is good, maybe try out some more media filters on the images and see what comes of it.
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback! Please see the next post, as I removed the triptych frame and masks, added drawing lines, and hand-written the haiku to make it all more integrated. I'd love more feedback on the next post so I can adjust anything else needed before our next critique. Thanks again!
Delete-Dorothy
This is very sweet, I'm really enjoying the natural brush filters and the soft colors, though I do agree that the text could be incorporated with the images in a more seamless way. Love your concept!
ReplyDeleteThank you for your feedback! Please see the next post, as I removed the triptych frame and masks, added drawing lines, and hand-written the haiku to make it all more integrated. I'd love more feedback on the next post so I can adjust anything else needed before our next critique. Thanks again!
Delete-Dorothy
I like the idea you have going on and I enjoy the meaning behind the narrative.
ReplyDeleteI enjoy this a lot and you are really showing your concept strong. I can easily see the growth being shown in this image. This image bring happiness and is really up lifting. It shows that you can have some really hard and scary time yet you always get through them.
ReplyDeleteFrom Lauren B - Dorothy Smith
ReplyDeleteSuch a sweet image and story. Your use of color translates emotions very well and i'm glad you considered each photo independently. It makes the complete image as a whole stronger.
Thanks Ed! I've posted a new in-progress image after this one, thanks to all of the great feedback I've gotten. I am still working today and hope to make a second post later this afternoon.
ReplyDeleteFrom Cameron
ReplyDeleteThis is a sweet way to go about this project! I think the way it progresses through the baby’s size is very well represented. The haiku you incorporated is super nice too and could be added some other way and blended in to make it more seamless?
Thank you for your feedback! Please see the next post, as I removed the triptych frame and masks, added drawing lines, and hand-written the haiku to make it all more integrated. I'd love more feedback on the next post so I can adjust anything else needed before our next critique. Thanks again!
Delete-Dorothy